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Portfolio #11 Metacognitive Analysis

Metacognitive Reflection

The capacity of writing is extremely crucial in all the human beings. Writing is a way of communication that represents language through the inscriptions of signs and symbols.In my opinion writing  is a challenging work because in my writings I can see what I have learned, what I have acquired and what is still missing.

For a long time my writings were not accomplished. Firstly I used to write without being conscious of the huge variety of synonyms, antonyms or the distinctive linking words. Secondly I did not have a clear idea of what I wanted to express in my writings, sometimes I could not find the purpose of them. Besides I found very awkward the organization of the paragraphs of a thesis statement and also the topic establishment of it. Unquestionably, those difficulties plus the lack of appropriate words made my writings ghastly and abominable.  Therefore it was very arduous for me to attain a way of improving the different patterns. Finally, after reading some theory and discussing it in class, I tried to put into practice all what I have learnt in order to write more academically.

 Nonetheless, from my point of view, I still need to train myself and boost what is necessary. I must continue working impenetrable. Furthermore, I have to be aware of the assorted mistakes and attempt not to make them again. Writing is a hard work and it is my responsibility to achieve this skill.

New Vocabulary in my writing!

Ghastly:

1) Very bad or unpleasant [= horrible]:

A ghastly little hotel

The whole thing was a ghastly mistake.

The weather was ghastly.

2) Making you very frightened, upset, or shocked:

A ghastly accident

3 look/feel ghastly to look or feel ill, upset, or unhappy:

Are you all right? You look ghastly!

—ghastliness    noun [uncountable]

Abominable:

Extremely unpleasant or of very bad quality [= terrible]:

Abominable cruelty

—abominably   adverb:

Mavis behaved abominably.

Boost:

To increase or improve something and make it more successful:

The new resort area has boosted tourism.

Boost somebody's confidence/morale/ego      

The win boosted the team's confidence.

Impenetrable:

1)      Impossible to get through, see through, or get into:

The trees formed a dark and     impenetrable barrier.

The impenetrable blackness of the night

2)      Very difficult or impossible to understand:

Impenetrable legal jargon

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Entry #10 Research paper

 Nobody can say you cannot do something

"Art changed my life, before all was medication and screaming; now I have hope"

Everyone can be happy, even those suffering from a mental illness; art is one of the ways in which these people can be part of this society.

A mental illness is a medical condition that disrupts a person´s thinking, feeling, mood, ability to relate to others and daily functioning. Just as diabetes is a disorder of the pancreas, mental illnesses are medical conditions that often result in a diminished capacity for coping with the ordinary demands of life. 

To begin with, serious mental illnesses include major depression, schizophrenia, bipolar disorder, obsessive compulsive disorder (OCD), panic disorder, posttraumatic stress disorder (PTSD) and borderline personality disorder. Secondly, mental illnesses can affect persons of any age, race, religion or income. Mental illnesses are not the result of personal weakness, lack of character or poor upbringing. Mental illnesses are treatable. Most people diagnosed with a serious mental illness can experience relief from their symptoms by actively participating in an individual treatment plan. It is very difficult for those people who do not have someone to support them, because those treatments need constancy and perseverance. And sometimes most of the patients do not follow what they have to because they do not receive the necessary attention from their families, and therefore they finally abandon their therapies. A person that lives with someone that suffers from one of the previous mental illnesses, has to be very conscious of what they have to do with that person, how to react at certain times, how to act when the patient is in crisis. It is not a painless work, sometimes you do not know what to do with him, and it causes affliction. For that reason it is essential that the family which has a member with one of these disorders is able to understand firstly that they have a person with a problem, and secondly and very important, that they can provide a good treatment with the necessary emotional support.

According to the distinctive places where patients can go to spend their time learning different skills and can be seen by different psychologists and psychiatrists, we can mention the hospital called Borda, a very famous place where many people are attended there. However, this building does not have the necessary tools to work , as it has been left aside by the authorities, but what most people do not understand or know is the fact that in spite of all the deficiencies this hospital has, it is the only place that contains the best doctors around the world. It has workshops where patients can develop their own abilities, and the most important thing is that this place is a public one; unfortunately many social works do not cover the patients´ treatments. Sadly, the government of Downtown wants to overthrow that building, what he does not know is that loads of people live there and spend their life going there. So if it disappears, many of them will not know where to go. Lots of people do not believe that someone with mental disorders is able to create a piece of art; however the patients of Borda have been able to develop their talent thanks the different workshops the hospital has. There, they have a radio in which they can tell others what they feel and think and also they can give their opinions about different topics. This radio is called ¨La Colifata¨.

Patients that can play any instrument participate in the radio programme and show the audience what they can do. Doctors also take part in this project. We have already mentioned the term workshops that mean places where patients go and do different activities proposed by therapists and psychologists. 

There is also another place where they can express what they know an that is the F.A.B. In the F.A.B.(Frente de Artistas del Borda) currently operating Theatre artistic workshops, puppets, music, mime, Participatory Theatre, Body, Dance, Visual Arts, Literature, Journalism and Photography. To them we add one of "deinstitutionalization" theoretical workshop where discussion on this topic considered Ideology axis FAB. Each workshop runs a coordination team composed artistic coordinator, one psychological and one or more contributors. Thus, the proposed work is interdisciplinary, as it has with the joint participation of members of different artistic disciplines and psychologists, with subsequent incorporation into the work team sociologists and social psychologists, among others. The artistic coordinator serves to convey conceptual and practical resources pertaining to their artistic discipline, coordinates a group creative process, and brings his knowledge of codes of professional and human relations in their field. 

In conclusion, art is everywhere and manages to show the best of anyone, even of those with mental illnesses.They only need support and affection,the rest can be done as any human being.

Sources:

Nami(1996)Mental illnesses.[ONLINE]Available at http://www.nami.org/Template.cfm?Section=By_Illness.[Last Accessed 09-08-2013 2013]

Frente de artistasdel borda(2007)Talleres[ONLINE]Available at http://www.frentedeartistas.co.ar/talleres/.[Last Accessed 09-08-2013]

Pablo Irles (2008).Aquarius 2008 colifata.[ONLINE]Available at http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yTvfVCgBPUs.[Last Accessed 09-08-2013]

Entry #9 New alternative conclusion paragraph

Jimena-Magali



Having a lot of people become concious about the risks of irresponsible behaviour of drivers who use cellphones on the road, legislators should treat this danger seriously.

Entry #8 Immigration

Peer Assessment between Magali and Florencia

What is Immigration?


Immigration is the movement of people into a country or region to which they are not native in order to settle there. There are lots of reasons why people immigrate, one of them  for instance, is economic, people think that perhaps in another country they would improve their situation, there is a necessity to find a new job in another place. On the other hand, there are many who have to move because of a natural disaster, that situation is extremely frustrtating, several people do not recover from that episode. And finally there are also a few who decide to build a new future far away from their former country, they prefer to change their lives and look for a modern and advanced state. Immigration is the introduction of new people into a country that is not your own.




Immigration is the movement of people into a country or region to which they are not native in order to settle there. There are lots of reasons why inabitants immigrate, one of them  for instance, is economic, people think that perhaps in another country they would improve their situation, there is a necessity to find a new job in another place. On the other hand, there are many who have to move because of a natural disaster, that situation is extremely frustrtating, some communities do not recover from that episode. And finally there are also a few who decide to build a new future far away from their former country, they prefer to change their lives and look for a modern and advanced state. Immigration is the introduction of a multitude into a country that is not your own.






Sources:
Wikipedia(2013).Immigration.[ONLINE]Available at: en.wikipedia.org.[Last Accessed 09 June 2013]

Entry #7 Topic Sentence- Body -Conclusion Sentence

Entry #7
Assignment shared with Florencia Tovagliari (ISFD N°41)

The significant decision to have a child


(Magali´s paragraph)


Having a first child is difficult because of the significant adjustments in your life(Topic Sentence).One of the things you have to take into account when you decide to have a baby is the fact that from that moment on you are going to think about someone else. It is not only to have a baby because this fact is part of our life, but to take responsibility for this human being. Your body starts changing; your mood also changes because now you will have to pay attention to what the other person wants, your attitudes will be different too, as perhaps at times you will prefer to stay at home taking care of your baby than going out to enjoy yourself. Your life will change; of course due to a good reason if you have been thinking carefully about it, if not, it will probably be a circumstance for you, so you have to be extremely sure that you have made the correct decision. This is especially for those girls who usually think that a baby would be a good option to feel happy; unfortunately they do not consider all the changes this choice involves. Giving birth is an extraordinary experience if you have the necessary tools to face this event, but it will be gruelling, if you do not contemplate all the modificatios this incident implies. (Conclusion Sentence)








(Florencia´s version)





Having a first baby will definitely change your life, from your schedule, workload, sleeping time to your body and your mind. (Topic Sentence). One of the things you have to take into account when you decide to have a baby is the fact that from that moment on you are going to think about someone else. It is not only to have a baby because this fact is part of our life , but to take responsibility for this human being. Your body starts changing; your mood also changes because now you will have to pay attention to what the other person wants, your attitudes will be different too, as perhaps at times you will prefer to saty at home taking care of your baby than going out to enjoy yourself. Your life will change; of course due to a good reason if you have been thinking carefully about it, of not, it will probably be a circumstance for you, so you have to be extremely sure thet you have made the correct decision. This is especially for those girls who usually think that a baby would be a good option to feel happy; unfortunately they do not consider all the changes this choice involves. Giving birth is an act of love  and courage, all women are prepared to do it but there are some of them who are not prepeared to face this event, they need to be aware that a child is a responsibility for life.

Metacognitive Analysis:

According to our work, I think that we both agree with our topic and conclusion sentence, my  mate´sentences are suitable for my text, and from my point of view her conclusion sentence is better than mine, because she has a short reflection about what a woman is able to do, she finishes with an excellent idea of women, the fact that we are able to give birth. So I think what she writes is great. On the other hand, maybe my topic sentence is stronger than her, because of the vocablury I use,  however as I said before both have concurred, and that means we have a great connection in our works, what makes me feel comfortable and secure.