Jimena-MagaliHaving a lot of people become concious about the risks of irresponsible behaviour of drivers who use cellphones on the road, legislators should treat this danger seriously.
viernes, 14 de junio de 2013
Entry #9 New alternative conclusion paragraph
Jimena-MagaliHaving a lot of people become concious about the risks of irresponsible behaviour of drivers who use cellphones on the road, legislators should treat this danger seriously.
domingo, 9 de junio de 2013
Entry #8 Immigration
Peer Assessment between Magali and Florencia
What is Immigration?
Immigration is the movement of people into a country or region to which they are not native in order to settle there. There are lots of reasons why people immigrate, one of them for instance, is economic, people think that perhaps in another country they would improve their situation, there is a necessity to find a new job in another place. On the other hand, there are many who have to move because of a natural disaster, that situation is extremely frustrtating, several people do not recover from that episode. And finally there are also a few who decide to build a new future far away from their former country, they prefer to change their lives and look for a modern and advanced state. Immigration is the introduction of new people into a country that is not your own.
Immigration is the movement of people into a country or region to which they are not native in order to settle there. There are lots of reasons why inabitants immigrate, one of them for instance, is economic, people think that perhaps in another country they would improve their situation, there is a necessity to find a new job in another place. On the other hand, there are many who have to move because of a natural disaster, that situation is extremely frustrtating, some communities do not recover from that episode. And finally there are also a few who decide to build a new future far away from their former country, they prefer to change their lives and look for a modern and advanced state. Immigration is the introduction of a multitude into a country that is not your own.
Sources:
Wikipedia(2013).Immigration.[ONLINE]Available at: en.wikipedia.org.[Last Accessed 09 June 2013]
What is Immigration?
Immigration is the movement of people into a country or region to which they are not native in order to settle there. There are lots of reasons why people immigrate, one of them for instance, is economic, people think that perhaps in another country they would improve their situation, there is a necessity to find a new job in another place. On the other hand, there are many who have to move because of a natural disaster, that situation is extremely frustrtating, several people do not recover from that episode. And finally there are also a few who decide to build a new future far away from their former country, they prefer to change their lives and look for a modern and advanced state. Immigration is the introduction of new people into a country that is not your own.
Immigration is the movement of people into a country or region to which they are not native in order to settle there. There are lots of reasons why inabitants immigrate, one of them for instance, is economic, people think that perhaps in another country they would improve their situation, there is a necessity to find a new job in another place. On the other hand, there are many who have to move because of a natural disaster, that situation is extremely frustrtating, some communities do not recover from that episode. And finally there are also a few who decide to build a new future far away from their former country, they prefer to change their lives and look for a modern and advanced state. Immigration is the introduction of a multitude into a country that is not your own.
Sources:
Wikipedia(2013).Immigration.[ONLINE]Available at: en.wikipedia.org.[Last Accessed 09 June 2013]
lunes, 3 de junio de 2013
Entry #7 Topic Sentence- Body -Conclusion Sentence
Entry #7
Assignment shared with Florencia Tovagliari (ISFD N°41)
The significant decision to have a child
(Magali´s paragraph)
Having a first child is difficult because of the significant adjustments in your life(Topic Sentence).One of the things you have to take into account when you decide to have a baby is the fact that from that moment on you are going to think about someone else. It is not only to have a baby because this fact is part of our life, but to take responsibility for this human being. Your body starts changing; your mood also changes because now you will have to pay attention to what the other person wants, your attitudes will be different too, as perhaps at times you will prefer to stay at home taking care of your baby than going out to enjoy yourself. Your life will change; of course due to a good reason if you have been thinking carefully about it, if not, it will probably be a circumstance for you, so you have to be extremely sure that you have made the correct decision. This is especially for those girls who usually think that a baby would be a good option to feel happy; unfortunately they do not consider all the changes this choice involves. Giving birth is an extraordinary experience if you have the necessary tools to face this event, but it will be gruelling, if you do not contemplate all the modificatios this incident implies. (Conclusion Sentence)
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(Florencia´s version)
Having a first baby will definitely change your life, from your schedule, workload, sleeping time to your body and your mind. (Topic Sentence). One of the things you have to take into account when you decide to have a baby is the fact that from that moment on you are going to think about someone else. It is not only to have a baby because this fact is part of our life , but to take responsibility for this human being. Your body starts changing; your mood also changes because now you will have to pay attention to what the other person wants, your attitudes will be different too, as perhaps at times you will prefer to saty at home taking care of your baby than going out to enjoy yourself. Your life will change; of course due to a good reason if you have been thinking carefully about it, of not, it will probably be a circumstance for you, so you have to be extremely sure thet you have made the correct decision. This is especially for those girls who usually think that a baby would be a good option to feel happy; unfortunately they do not consider all the changes this choice involves. Giving birth is an act of love and courage, all women are prepared to do it but there are some of them who are not prepeared to face this event, they need to be aware that a child is a responsibility for life.
Metacognitive Analysis:
According to our work, I think that we both agree with our topic and conclusion sentence, my mate´sentences are suitable for my text, and from my point of view her conclusion sentence is better than mine, because she has a short reflection about what a woman is able to do, she finishes with an excellent idea of women, the fact that we are able to give birth. So I think what she writes is great. On the other hand, maybe my topic sentence is stronger than her, because of the vocablury I use, however as I said before both have concurred, and that means we have a great connection in our works, what makes me feel comfortable and secure.
Assignment shared with Florencia Tovagliari (ISFD N°41)
The significant decision to have a child
(Magali´s paragraph)
Having a first child is difficult because of the significant adjustments in your life(Topic Sentence).One of the things you have to take into account when you decide to have a baby is the fact that from that moment on you are going to think about someone else. It is not only to have a baby because this fact is part of our life, but to take responsibility for this human being. Your body starts changing; your mood also changes because now you will have to pay attention to what the other person wants, your attitudes will be different too, as perhaps at times you will prefer to stay at home taking care of your baby than going out to enjoy yourself. Your life will change; of course due to a good reason if you have been thinking carefully about it, if not, it will probably be a circumstance for you, so you have to be extremely sure that you have made the correct decision. This is especially for those girls who usually think that a baby would be a good option to feel happy; unfortunately they do not consider all the changes this choice involves. Giving birth is an extraordinary experience if you have the necessary tools to face this event, but it will be gruelling, if you do not contemplate all the modificatios this incident implies. (Conclusion Sentence)
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(Florencia´s version)
Having a first baby will definitely change your life, from your schedule, workload, sleeping time to your body and your mind. (Topic Sentence). One of the things you have to take into account when you decide to have a baby is the fact that from that moment on you are going to think about someone else. It is not only to have a baby because this fact is part of our life , but to take responsibility for this human being. Your body starts changing; your mood also changes because now you will have to pay attention to what the other person wants, your attitudes will be different too, as perhaps at times you will prefer to saty at home taking care of your baby than going out to enjoy yourself. Your life will change; of course due to a good reason if you have been thinking carefully about it, of not, it will probably be a circumstance for you, so you have to be extremely sure thet you have made the correct decision. This is especially for those girls who usually think that a baby would be a good option to feel happy; unfortunately they do not consider all the changes this choice involves. Giving birth is an act of love and courage, all women are prepared to do it but there are some of them who are not prepeared to face this event, they need to be aware that a child is a responsibility for life.
According to our work, I think that we both agree with our topic and conclusion sentence, my mate´sentences are suitable for my text, and from my point of view her conclusion sentence is better than mine, because she has a short reflection about what a woman is able to do, she finishes with an excellent idea of women, the fact that we are able to give birth. So I think what she writes is great. On the other hand, maybe my topic sentence is stronger than her, because of the vocablury I use, however as I said before both have concurred, and that means we have a great connection in our works, what makes me feel comfortable and secure.
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