Entry #7 Topic Sentence- Body -Conclusion Sentence

Entry #7
Assignment shared with Florencia Tovagliari (ISFD N°41)

The significant decision to have a child


(Magali´s paragraph)


Having a first child is difficult because of the significant adjustments in your life(Topic Sentence).One of the things you have to take into account when you decide to have a baby is the fact that from that moment on you are going to think about someone else. It is not only to have a baby because this fact is part of our life, but to take responsibility for this human being. Your body starts changing; your mood also changes because now you will have to pay attention to what the other person wants, your attitudes will be different too, as perhaps at times you will prefer to stay at home taking care of your baby than going out to enjoy yourself. Your life will change; of course due to a good reason if you have been thinking carefully about it, if not, it will probably be a circumstance for you, so you have to be extremely sure that you have made the correct decision. This is especially for those girls who usually think that a baby would be a good option to feel happy; unfortunately they do not consider all the changes this choice involves. Giving birth is an extraordinary experience if you have the necessary tools to face this event, but it will be gruelling, if you do not contemplate all the modificatios this incident implies. (Conclusion Sentence)








(Florencia´s version)





Having a first baby will definitely change your life, from your schedule, workload, sleeping time to your body and your mind. (Topic Sentence). One of the things you have to take into account when you decide to have a baby is the fact that from that moment on you are going to think about someone else. It is not only to have a baby because this fact is part of our life , but to take responsibility for this human being. Your body starts changing; your mood also changes because now you will have to pay attention to what the other person wants, your attitudes will be different too, as perhaps at times you will prefer to saty at home taking care of your baby than going out to enjoy yourself. Your life will change; of course due to a good reason if you have been thinking carefully about it, of not, it will probably be a circumstance for you, so you have to be extremely sure thet you have made the correct decision. This is especially for those girls who usually think that a baby would be a good option to feel happy; unfortunately they do not consider all the changes this choice involves. Giving birth is an act of love  and courage, all women are prepared to do it but there are some of them who are not prepeared to face this event, they need to be aware that a child is a responsibility for life.

Metacognitive Analysis:

According to our work, I think that we both agree with our topic and conclusion sentence, my  mate´sentences are suitable for my text, and from my point of view her conclusion sentence is better than mine, because she has a short reflection about what a woman is able to do, she finishes with an excellent idea of women, the fact that we are able to give birth. So I think what she writes is great. On the other hand, maybe my topic sentence is stronger than her, because of the vocablury I use,  however as I said before both have concurred, and that means we have a great connection in our works, what makes me feel comfortable and secure.